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I am wonjun, I remember when I met you. It was last Monday, January 7th. You was given to me because I got out of the dormitory late. You made me to feel a lot of emotions. I was sad, shocking, and worried to meet you.
You made me to be sad. Do you know about your powers? You can make me to have no prize. Even you can kick me out of here. Those make me to feel sad. Everyone feels sad and even ashamed.
You made me to be shocked. I feel very surprised. I and my mind say ' Do I have a yellow card now?' I was so shocked and it was a big panic to me. I don't want the panic again.
You made me to feel worried. the worrry was about getting so much yellow cards, which can be a big problem to me. Kicking out of here is very serious. Also you can mean that I have bad attitude in the camp.
I don't want these emotions. It is full of desperation.
Wonjun,
답글삭제I'm sorry to hear you got a yellow card. But I hope you have learned from this and will not get any more.
This ode needs to be more descriptive. Try describing the yellow card using personificaations (giving it human qualities). An ode is poetic so you need to use metaphors and repetition as well. Why not try writing another one with these things in mind?
Your ode is interesting. I laughed so much after I read this ode.
답글삭제It was funny. I hate yellow warning card very much.. I hope you not to get any yellow cards during this camp.
답글삭제Hi!
답글삭제It is not a good news that you received a yellow card. Try hard not to get another one. Your ode has to be much more descriptive by using more personifications and metaphors. Keep working hard~
-Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)